Story-Telling Unit: Idea Development - Telling the idea

We took it turns to tell our pitches and then our ideas. After telling mine these were the areas that raised concern:

1. Police getting involved

Why? 

- It's too much for a 10 minute film.
- They really create a problem for the father.


My Opinion

- In my eyes; the police creates a problem for the father to an extent. With their involvement, this is no longer a quiet-low-down task for the father. As was his intentions.
-And for the "too much" case, I did have the film structured in a way that the 'standoff' is the majority of the film. Plus the film ins't in real time.


Counter-Arguement (provided by myself to avoid bias)

- The father would understand the potential consequences for pulling out a gun in public and essentially taking someone hostage.
- Yes but even so, this is a short film: no-one expects big stuff like this in a 10 min long piece.


2. The father having a gun

Why?

- Guns, in Britain?
- Using just fists makes contact more inflicting, more human. Instead of just using an object to control someone. It's easy (psychologically) to kill with a gun but not with your own hands.

My Opinion

- I always had the gun as a replica; it could never fire.
- Fist make for a more mature, potentially more violent film. Which might make it harder to watch.

Counter-Arguements 

- Even so, a replica gun. If I absolutely must have a weapon, why not a knife? Much more relevant and contemporary.



3. Text on screen at the end 

Why?

- It's too easy to end things with this method.

My opinion

- I quite like the text at the end: if done well enough you can land one last sucker punch on the audience. (Text at end will appear at bottom of this post).
- This a personal taste thing.
- It can help cut what could'e been 2-3 minutes or even more, down to 30 seconds. Which is valuable when making a short film when you need to use every second well.



Text on screen: