Pre-Production Unit: Pre-Production - Tutor Script Feedback and First Reworking

I sent my tutor a copy of the first draft of the script so they could read through it.

We then sat together as they gave feedback for it:


- It needs a goal.
- The characters are unbelievable: Sean and Perry don't convince as a contract killer and a drug dealer.
- The card scene is a waste of time and doesn't give us anything.
- They sound like students.
- There needs to be a progressive build up to a boiling point.
- Basically the script needs a massive redraft.


Some of the points I would still defend such as the card scene and the unbelievability as one is my style of writing and the other is intentional.
I do understand about the goal aspect: 99% of films do have an established goal but again I intentionally didn't include one.

So a redraft was needed for Grit: something I was reluctant to do as I did get very attached to my idea. I liked how it was and I feel it made sense.

After the talk I got down to reworking the plot with the added knowledge of the feedback and the Delusional Disorder.

I was struggling a lot with trying to keep aspects of the film I wanted such as the film breaking; the idea that no-one is real in the diegesis and the Delusional Disorder and mix them with a goal.

Coming up with a goal was very challenging because of how the film was constructed originally without one: it was designed without a goal and to put one in created a disequilibrium with the purpose of certain aspects and the cohesiveness of the story.

This meant I needed to look at the entire plot in general...