Well I'm going to go into more detail on the notes I made to clarify my visions and to make understanding of my (bad) handwriting along with extra notes and ideas I have come up with since.
"He drowsed and was aware of silence heaped round him"
- I picture the 'He's head nodding as sleep is gradually winning it's battle against him.
"Unshaken as the steadfast walls"
- Steadfast means 'firm' and 'loyal'.
- reading this line and the next doesn't quite make sense so I'm wondering if the 'as' means a comparison instead of a 'whilst'. So the sentence would read like: "(the silence) unshaken like the sturdy walls." This, to me, makes much more sense as the silence is being compared to the structural integrity of the walls instead of the walls being called "aqueous".
"Aqueous like floating rays of amber light"
- Aqueous mean water, so the rays are flowing in the air like water.
- I'm reading this as the rays are aqueous. So my first thought would be a shot of the sun's rays shining. The problem with this is that at this time of year, the sun's going to be harder to film.
"Soaring and quivering in the wings of sleep"
- So the rays of amber light are moving around the 'He's' face; as he is the one asleep.
- Essentially a shot of sunlight is lighting up around him. I could shine a light such as a torch or one of the tungsten lights onto the actors' face: using something to perhaps diffuse the light a bit.
"Silence and safety; and his mortal shore"
Lipped by the inward, moonless waves of death"
- These waves are referring to the water that the 'He' is being given.
- I was thinking a shot of crashing waves or even a close up of running water or water sloshing about. Raising the frame rate to 60 frames-per-second means I can slow the footage down to half of it's actual speed and still get 30 frames-per-second from the slowed down video.
"Someone was holding water to his mouth."
- The Narrator is doing this. Holding a bottle of water and resting the neck on the 'He's lips. The 'He' doesn't acknowledge the Narrator's presence.
"He swallowed, unresisting; moaned and dropped"
- Close up of 'He's throat as he swallows.
- He winces or groans.
"Through crimson gloom to darkness; and forgot"
- Crimson darkness: I picture the 'He' disappearing into darkness, as if he were being pulled backwards. Or has fallen out of the darkness.
- 'Dropped through' So 'He' could be falling through the darkness.
"The opiate throb and ache that was his wound."
- The water made the 'He' forget about the pain he's in.
The last three lines I read as this:
"He swallowed: unresisting. He moaned and dropped through the crimson gloom to darkness; and forgot the opiate throb and ache that was his wound."
"Water-calm, sliding green above the weir"
- A silent 3 to 5 seconds as the 'He' wakes up on the floor. He is outside, next to a lake (I'm thinking the lake in Mote Park.)
"Water-a sky-lit alley for his boat"
- The water is lighting up his path. This might be tricky to pull off so I'm thinking of substituting that for just a day-time shot. That way the water is 'technically' lit up but so is the rest of the area.
- The boat. I was thinking of a vehicle other than a boat. But if 'He' is in a park then a bench can be his "boat".
"Bird-voiced, bordered and reflected with flowers"
"And shaken hues of summer; drifting down"
"He dipped contended oars, and sighed, and slept."
- He dips his hand into the lake and lifts it back out, staring. He sighs. Then the narrator continues.
- 'He' shuts his eyes.
"Night, with a gust of wind, was in the ward"
- Suddenly cuts to back in the room.
"Blowing the curtain to a glimmering curve."
- This won't be a focused thing, more a descriptive one. So we won't see a close-up of curtains (or the ward curtains as the poet is most-likely referring to) or any attention drawn to them.
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